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Appréciation

La durée de l'oral est trop courte (3:28 minutes au lieu de 5!) et la 2ème partie de ton texte est hors-sujet. La 1ère partie reste convenable mais il y a très peu d'erreurs ! C'est dommage qu'il ne soit pas rédigé par toi au lieu d'avoir été rédigé/corrigé par quelqu'un qui est bilingue! Certains phrases/mots sont mal prononcés.

A l'oral il y a quelques petites erreurs par rapport au texte :

"In first part" =} "In the first part…"

"when AIDS was discovered on May 20, 1983" =} "when AIDS was discovered on May 20th, 1983 **(nineteen eighty-three)

"the population thought it could be transmit by…" =} "the population thought it could be transmitted by…"

"….could be transmit …." =} "…could be transmitted "

"….were developed in the 1919s and 2000s (twenty thousands) =} "were developed in the 1990s (nineteen nineties) and 2000s (the years two thousand)

"….because we can be become addict but…" =} "….because we can be become addicted but…"

Attention à la prononciation de certains mots comme : "behaviour", "HIV", "immunodeficiency", "deaths", "thought", "through", "transmission", "aware", "themselves", "arrival", "admit", "socialization", "use", "friends", "place", "us", "case", "behaviour", "knowing".

Tu aurais eu environ 5/10 pour cette partie de l'oral.

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The idea of progress

I'm going to talk to you about AIDS and telephones, my problem question is "How has the population's way of thinking and behaviour changed in relation to AIDS and telephones?"

In the first part, I'm going to talk about AIDS and in the second part, I'm going to talk about telephones.

Approximately 38 million people worldwide were living with HIV (human immunodeficiency virus) in 2018.

The AIDS is an abbreviation for Acquired Immune Deficiency Syndrome, it’s a serious disease caused by a virus that destroys the body's natural protection from infection.

There were 770,000 AIDS-related deaths in 2018.

At first, when AIDS was discovered on May 20, 1983, some people in the population thought it could be transmitted by a handpick handshake. Others thought it could be transmitted between gay men.

However, after further research the studies were able to determine that the AIDS virus is transmitted through sexual, blood and maternal transmission.

The only positive thing about the virus is that people have become aware of the need to protect themselves during sex.

For the second part we're going to talk about the phones.

Following the arrival of mobile phones which were developed in the 1990s and 2000s =} Cette phrase est inachevée

We can admit that it is a revolutionary tool and that there are many positive points about this product but also some negative points. We will start with the negative points and then finish on a good note with the positive points.

For me the negative point of the mobile phone is that it creates a lack of socialization on the part of people who use their phones a lot, which can make us not take advantage of our friends and family, and young people of our age spend a lot of time on it them .

But the mobile phone is also a big plus in our lives because we can be brought to have instant information anywhere , it also allows us to take pictures, send important messages or not just to our loved ones but especially to call people or emergencies in case of emergencies and this can save lives.

We can therefore conclude that people using mobile phones do not always adapt a good behaviour because we can be become addicted but it they can be very useful. And that people think a lot without really knowing and spread rumours.