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A l'oral il y a quelques petites erreurs par rapport au texte :

"as well as homophobic behavior, change" =} as well as homophobic behavior, changed

"….described as a"gay cancer" in the United at the beginning of years 1891" =} "described as a"gay cancer" in the United States in the early 1980s.

"…mentalities have gradually evolve" =} "mentalities have gradually evolved"

"they make a progress" =} "mentalities have gradually evolved"

"frowned upon or punish" =} "frowned upon or punished"

Attention à la prononciation de certains mots comme : "punished", "considered", "illness", "other", "virus", "means", "helped", "justice", "condemned", "vary"

Il faut bien prononcer les "s" à la 3ème pers. au singulier,…

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My problem-question is : How has the perception of the AIDS disease, as well as homophobic behaviour, changed ?

Introduction

Today, I am going to talk about behavioural changes and prejudices in the face of regarding AIDS and homophobia.

To address this topic, we will ask ourselves the following question :

How has the perception of the AIDS disease, as well as homophobic behavior, changed ?

We will first talk about their people's prejudices, then about the evolution and finally about future changes.

I/Prejudices about AIDS

The first patients were identified in 1981. It is said that the first patients were young homosexual men, hence the stigma !

AIDS was even described as a"gay cancer" in the United States in the early 1980s. Many thought that homosexuals were being punished by cancer. This only reinforced homophobia.

In addition to associating homosexuality with AIDS, it was considered a mental illness.

Indeed, discrimination and prejudice against homosexuals in employment, services and housing, in addition to associating them with the disease, further excluded them.

Don't forgetting We mustn't forget some countries, like those in Africa since Africa was considered the epidemiological starting point.

II/ The evolution of the disease

Since the discovery of the virus and its means of transmission (blood and sex), mentalities have gradually evolved. Unfortunately, fears remain among some people.

Even if films, such as Philadelphia, have helped to raise awareness of the issue. Philadelphia was the first Hollywood film to deal with AIDS, homosexuality and homophobia.

In terms of care, they have come a long way, but there is still no vaccine.

History has seen homosexuality evolve from "sin", then "crime", "disease" to "natural occurrence".

There have been political battles for same-sex marriage.

But there are still many battles to be fought for justice and equality.

III/Upcoming change

We need to find a vaccine for AIDS and absolutely make people understand the risks of infection. In the United States, the number of states where homosexuality is condemned is declining. There have also been declines in some states, in part since the election of President Trump.

The rights of homosexuals in the United States vary greatly from state to state.

But of course I think what the LGBT community wants is that everywhere they have the right to marry, to adopt, and that they are no longer afraid of being frowned upon or punished.

These are the battles to be fought and the changes to come.

Conclusion

Since the beginning of all this, there have been advancements improvements . There's still a lot to be said and done.

Change is very slow.