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Appréciation

Tes erreurs sont les mots qui sont barrés dans ton texte et les corrections sont celles qui sont soulignées en gras. Ton texte est assez bien écrit et la durée est parfaite (5:36 mins). Par contre, certains phrases/mots sont mal prononcés.

Tu aurais eu environ 7/10 pour cette partie de l'oral.

A l'oral il y a quelques petites erreurs par rapport au texte :

"From several years" =} "For several years"….

"….also transcribed false information which result for example

"being no exception of gender, sex, sexual orientation or wealth" =} certains mots dans cette partie de la phrase sont mal prononcés

"should not be explained under any circumstances" =} should not be excluded under any circumstances

"In spite of all this there are still people who put away those who have AIDS out of fear" =} Tous les mots de cette phrase sont mal prononcés

21 century =} 21st(first) century

"It can therefore be conclude that =} "It can therefore be concluded that

"In more than a hundred centuries homosexuality is illegal" =} "In more than a hundred countries homosexuality is illegal", "paediatrics"

Attention à la prononciation de certains mots comme : "arrived", "appeared", "rare", "disease", "known", "AIDS", "transcribed", "disease", "conveyed", "cure", "which", "repressed", societies", "Middle East", "societies", "lack", "knowledge",

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I will answer the following question : « what can differences between humans cause ?»

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Frist First, when an epidemic arrived happened in 1970, in New York appeared many of their homosexual patients appeared to suffer from asthenia, weight loss or even sometimes rare cancer. This disease was first known as gay pneumonia and then became AIDS. For several years, the population did not have much information on how it was transmitted, which led to discrimination and exclusion, especially of the homosexual population. The media during these years also transcribed false information which resulted for example in the movie philadelphia a loss of in which the principal character, Andrew Beckett, lost all his friends and his job because he was people were afraid of this disease. At present in 2020, we know that this disease occurs through the sexual contact bloodstream blood transfussion or during pregnancy and breastfeeding. But above all the message conveyed is that the disease being no exception of gender, sex, sexual orientation or wealth, everyone can be affected and should not be excluded under any circumstances. Then there was a treatment but that did not cure him it does not cure people suffering from AIDS and , today, only two cases in the world have managed to cure be cured from this disease. In spite of all this there are still people who put away alienate those who have AIDS out of fear.

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Secondly, among AIDS is also often falsely linked to sexual orientation, which can lead to exclusion or discrimination.

According to the times generational periods and cultures, homosexuality in its various forms is more or less accepted or repressed. At the beginning of the 21st century, there was a tendency in Western societies to accept and, in some countries, to establish a legal status (marriage). However, in 10 countries, mainly in Africa and the Middle East, “homosexual acts” are sentenced to more or less severe sentences, up to life imprisonment or the death penalty. In more than a hundred countries homosexuality is illegal. Even in countries where homosexuality is accepted, this does not prevent discrimination at work, for example. The rejection of homosexuality or homosexuals by some societies stems from a lack of knowledge of this theme. For example, certain individuals or societies are confounding homosexuality, paediatrics and paediatrics?? répétition!!!. In the world there are many people who are homophobic even some whole sometimes, the entire country.

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It can therefore be concluded that certain differences between humans can lead to discrimination, exclusion, homosexuality, imprisonment or the death penalty. This disadvantages the freedom to think, to express oneself or to practice ones beliefs freely.