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Appréciation

Tes erreurs sont les mots qui sont barrés dans ton texte et les corrections sont celles qui sont soulignées en gras. Ton texte est assez bien écrit mais il est un peu court (4:25 mins).

A l'oral il y a quelques petites erreurs par rapport au texte :

"….thus changed the mindness or today's men =} "thus changed the mindset of today's men

"….as soon as person had AIDS she was exclude from society and judge as a bad person" =} "….as soon as person had AIDS she was excluded from society and judged as a bad person"

It was also possibly that because of a lack of healthy average =} "It was also possible that because of a lack of health average

"…thanks to technologique and research it was proving that…" =} "….thanks to technology and research it was proving that…"

"For conclude the mentalities and opinions we evolude over time =} "To conclude the mentalities and opinions we evolve over time

Attention à la prononciation de certains mots comme "evolved", "idea", "scientific", "lack", "awareness", "fear", "thought", "truth", "terrified", "health", "open-minded", "sidelined",

Il faut bien prononcer les "s" à la 3ème pers. au singulier,…

Tu aurais eu environ 8/10 pour cette partie de l'oral.

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The idea of progress

Has discrimination against people infected with AIDS evolved and thus changed the mindset of today's men people today?

The idea of progress can be defined as an improvement, a develepment development or a change, a technical, scientific or social advance witch which continues to making the world a better place. I go am going to speak in a first time of the part about AIDS before and in my second part i speek **speaking about the AIDS now.

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I think that at the time ideas and mentalities were closed on many subjects like AIDS or because the virus is develled the developed through the lack of means of protection but, above all, also through the lack awareness of people about this danger. Because at the time as soon as person had AIDS he or she was excluded from society and judged as a bad person. I no longer We see this in the movie Philadelphia or where AIDS and homophobia is and clearly the main subjects. I think life at the time was very difficult if we had contracted the virus because we lost his would lose our job these and friends etc… fro fear .. They were afraid of you because everyone thought we they could have it just by through contact with the infected person and that was also why the infected people didn't tell the truth all the time. It was also possible that because of a lack of good health average, infected people would die. To finish on this partit part Où est le sujet de cette phrase shows well that people were terrified and closed their minds were narrow-minded about AIDS but thanks to many things today everyone is different. I'll argument **see* it in the next part.

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Today attitudes and opinions have changed a lot contrary to the times thanks to a lot times mal dit/confus thanks to a lot of things such as techological and healht medical advances that can prevent, help and care for people infected with AIDS because today the number of people who die are is much smaller than they were it was back then. There are also people who are much more open-minded now. We are more no longer sidelined or fired if we have AIDS because thanks to technology and research it was proving that we could catch it by sexual —voice contact . This allowed people to dedramatize the situation on this virus transition the transmission of this virus and become normal again with everyone.

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To conclude the mentalities and opinions we have evolved over time thanks to research and technology and this will continue again and again into the future.