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Ton texte est intéressant et bien structuré mais il n'y aucune erreur ! C'est dommage qu'il ne soit pas rédigé par toi au lieu d'avoir été rédigé/corrigé par quelqu'un qui est bilingue! De plus, j'ai remarqué que tu as arrêté l'enregistrement après chaque phrase alors qu'il fallait le faire en une seule prise! La durée de l'enregistrement est convenable.

Tu aurais eu environ 8/10 pour cette partie de l'oral.

A l'oral il y a quelques petites erreurs par rapport au texte :

"We will first see who has AIDS was accepted =} …first see how AIDS was accepted

"on the contrary they were accepted and they were even feared" =} "on the contrary they were rejected and they were even feared"

"Andrew decides to attack the cabinet for unfair similas" =} Andrew decides to attack the cabinet for unfair dismissal

"during sexually intercourse" (2 fois dans le texte) =} during sexual intercourse

"to protect us from the disease =} to protect ourselves from the disease

"as well as through the blood" =} cette phrase est mal prononcée

"This film clearly shows how AIDS was viewed before =} La partie soulignée de cette phrase est mal prononcée

Attention Ă  la prononciation de certains mots comme : "talk", "disease", "how", "frowned", "feared", "even", "malpractice", "convinced", "file", "own", "since", "feared", "warn",

Il faut bien prononcer les "s" Ă  la 3ème pers. au singulier,…

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The idea of progress__

AIDS is a taboo subject for some people. It’s very hard to talk about this. AIDS is a sexually transmitted disease as well as through the blood, for the moment still without treatment. Is AIDS better accepted today than in the past? We will first see how AIDS was accepted in the past and then we will see how AIDS is accepted today.

First, AIDS was frowned upon in the past. He It was not accepted at all. Thanks to the text "The handshake" studied in class we notice that people who had AIDS were not accepted by others, on the contrary they were rejected and they were even feared. In Philadelphia Andrew Beckett is a brilliant lawyer but he has AIDS and is fired for malpractice. He is convinced that he was kicked out because he has AIDS, Andrew decides to attack the cabinet for unfair dismissal. No lawyer wishes to take up the file, he resigns himself to ensuring his own defense. Until the day when Joe Miller, a black lawyer and initially homophobic who, at first, had refused to defend Andrew, decides to take charge of the file. This film clearly shows how AIDS was viewed before. For people it was very serious to have AIDS and were very afraid of getting it just by contact with the person who had AIDS. People did not necessarily protect themselves during sexual intercourse, the disease has had spread a lot before because they did not pay too much attention to sexually transmitted diseases.

We now know that AIDS is transmitted only by blood or by sexual intercourse and not by simple skin contact. But everyone still thinks differently about this disease. I therefore inquired about what my entourage thought on this subject. According to them, there has been progress since we discovered it, we are advancing in the creation of a treatment. We have more ways to protect ourselves from the disease, as well as fewer people who have the disease. AIDS is therefore less feared but we must always be very careful and always protect ourselves because it still exists. On the other hand, we are talking about it less and less except that we should always warn people because this disease has not disappeared. If we are all careful, it could probably go away. I think young people are paying less and less attention to this kind of disease.

So AIDS is still not accepted but we have more ways to stop it before it does too much damage to people, we can even cure it if it is discovered very early. Medicine is still doing a lot of research on the into finding a cure for this disease. From the past to today the acceptance of AIDS has evolved, people with AIDS are not no longer rejected, on the contrary they are helped to cure the disease.

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