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Appréciation

Tes erreurs sont les mots qui sont barrés dans ton texte et les corrections sont celles qui sont soulignées en gras. (Il y en a pas mal!!). Ton texte est intéressant mais il est un peu court (4:18 minutes au lieu de 5!) et il y a trop d'erreurs de prononciation.

Tu aurais eu environ 4/10 pour cette partie de l'oral.

A l'oral il y a quelques petites erreurs par rapport au texte :

"For the idea of the progress =} For the idea of progress,

the answer at the problem=} To answer at the problem

The search on the vaccination=} The search for for a vaccine

All doctors consider it a deadly virus. We was considered =} All doctors consider it a deadly virus. It was considered

because many dead around the world =} because it causes many deaths around the world

The first again ideas has become a priority =} The fight against AIDS has become a priority

detection of anti-HIV antibodies =} mal dit

It was found in saliva =} mal dit

HIV is transmitted in medy body fluids =} HIV is transmitted in many body fluids

To have a significant concentration =} To have a signification concentration

a mother can transmissing the virus to the fetus =} mother can transmit the virus to the fetus

The finally part is a search of the vaccination =} The final part is about looking for a vaccination

which is gradually expanishing it =} which is gradually expanding it

About 20 antiretroviral trungs were available in 20006(twenty thousand six) =} About 20 antiretroviral drugs were available in 2006(two thousand and six

nd are intended to interfere with different mechanisms =} mal dit

of scientific advanced number we allowed us to determine the form of the virus =} Mal dit

Attention à la prononciation de certains mots comme : "idea", "AIDS", "evolve", "transmission", "search", "discovered", "considered", "reconsidered", "called", "HIV", "tears", "weak", "blood", "equipment", "deaths", "contaminated", "slowed"

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The idea of progress

For the idea of progress, I'm going to talk to you about AIDS.

The problem is the virus to the beginning until now how did it evolve My problem question is "How has the disease evolved from the moment it was first found until now ? To answer at the problem this problem-question, we will answer it in three parts. The first part will be on the discovery of the virus, the second on the means of transmission, then finally on the search for a vaccine.

The virus was discovered in 1981, it destroys the immune system. All doctors consider it a deadly virus. It was considered an epidemic, but they reconsidered it as a global pandemic. It causes many deaths around the world. The fight against AIDS has become a priority for the United Nations through its UNAIDS program, as well as for number of governments. This disease has for the name AIDS, and it’s called HIV. The diagnosis is made in 2 stages: the first is the screening which passes by a detection of anti-HIV antibodies. Then secondly there is confirmation that if the antibodies detected are indeed linked to a HIV infection.

HIV is transmitted in many body fluids. It was can be found in saliva, tears and urine, but in insufficient concentrations and it's a weak infection. To have a significant concentration the transmission has to be by the voice of blood, breast milk, in the or sexual fluids. Any unprotected sex involves the risk of transmission of the virus. But there is also another mode of contamination, by contaminated medical equipment, which would be used for other patients. And during pregnancy, a mother can transmit the virus to the fetus.

Antiretroviral treatment is the therapeutic arsenal against HIV, which is gradually expanding it. About 20 antiretroviral drugs were available in 2006 and are intended to interfere with different mechanisms. Thanks to antiretrovirals the number of deaths has considerably decreased. But there are still a large number of deaths a every year worldwide. They search for antiretrovirals in France but between 7 and 10 years before the day even Confus; Je n'ai pas compris la fin de cette phrase. There are post expostitin exposition treatments, for example a person who has an unprotected intercourse with a person carrying HIV. It He can be contaminated, but there is a treatment which makes it possible to stop HIV or rather not to be contaminated.

Since the discovery of the virus, of scientific advanced number we allowed ** scientific advances have allowed us to determine the form of the virus. How it acts on people. This made it possible to make discoveries on treatments which slowed slow down the virus. So in almost 40 years we have made great improvements on how the virus is transmitted and therefore how to reduce the number of contaminations and deaths .