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Tes erreurs sont les mots qui sont barrés dans ton texte et les corrections sont celles qui sont soulignées en gras. Ton texte est assez bien mais il est trop court (3:38 minutes au lieu de 5 minutes!). J'ai remarqué que tu as arrêté l'enregistrement après chaque phrase pendant la présentation orale alors que tu aurais dû présenter le texte en une seule prise !

Tu aurais eu environ 5/10 pour cette partie de l'oral.

A l'oral il y a quelques petites erreurs par rapport au texte :

"This virus is a really plague =} This virus is a real plague

45 million have died =} 35 million have died

Il faut bien prononcer les "s" après les mots aux pluriel et à la 3ème pers. du singulier!

Attention à la prononciation de certains mots comme : "AIDS", "ravaged", "which", "consequently", "private", "hatred", "fear", "shared", "requires", "informed"

since the 1980s =} cette partie de la phrase est mal prononcée

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The idea of Progress

AIDS is a disease that ravaged the earth for the first time in 1908 the 1980s!. This virus is a real plague to which we still have not found a vaccine to protect the population. AIDS makes infected people very resistant to different diseases which causes a lot of deaths. In the world since the 1980s, there were have been 76.1 million people infected and 35 million have died. As AIDS is dangerous, people are afraid of being infected and, consequently, people are afraid of those affected. This is what we are going to see with the following problem problem-question "How are people discriminated against and why is this unfair?"

In our society we are surrounded by people with the virus in them. But most of these people do not disclose it to their private or professional entourages as this can have several consequences. Indeed the people will judge them and discriminated against discriminate against them , not necessarily by hatred, but by fear of the disease and fear of being contaminated by the virus. People are not going to want to shake hands, eat with them … While However these fears are silly as the virus cannot be shared by a simple wrist handshake or the like. AIDS is spread by sexual transmission; by direct contact with blood or during pregnancy. In the family setting, according to several witnesses, some relatives of the sick accept it but others will rule them out. In a professional context, in a society, this is even more problematic. People suffer social harassment, discrimination that often requires isolation, justified by an unfounded fear. As in the example seen in class "The handshake" there are people who do turn their work very well while they are but they get fired. In the example seen in class it is a great gifted lawyer, respected by everyone who gets fired. Nevertheless the day his parton he boss learns to he has AIDS he actually turns fires him without proof.

It can be concluded that the fear and discrimination of people with AIDS may come from a lack of knowledge of the disease and its means of transmission.

It would have The public should be informed more than that so that there is more less discrimination on against people with AIDS.

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