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A l'oral il y a quelques petites erreurs par rapport au texte :

"which results in a virtually non-existent immune system" =} certains mots dans cette phrase sont mal prononcés//

"The general mentality has not change since the discovery of this virus" =} "The general mentality has not changed since the discovery of this virus"

Attention à la prononciation de certains mots comme : "by fear", "final", "allows", "other", " vaccine", "know", "acquired", "postponed", " Saudi Arabia" , "Armenia", "NOW" there are associations…,

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The idea of progress

Are people affected by AIDS still discriminated against?

During the discovery of the illness, a strong discrimination has occured to sicks by fears of sicken directed against AIDS sufferers due to a fear of the illness , but the things do they have progress nowadays? but has the situation improved since then ? we went in a first time see will first look at the discrimination at the beginning then the evolution tp until nowadys.

First of all, AIDS is the final stage of HIV (Human Immunodeficiency Virus), which results in a virtually non-existent immune system that allows opportunistic diseases to enter. HIV was discovered in 1983 by Luc Montagnier. A lot of discrimination took place at that time because there wasn't a lot of information about it other than the fact that you could catch it, that it was deadly and that there was no known vaccine. People were afraid of catching it so they usually ran kept away from the sick, which can could lead to job losses like in the movie "Philadelphia by Jonathan Demme, 1993" where Andrew Beckett, a brilliant lawyer, was fired because of AIDS.

Today, we know that HIV is only acquired through sexual relations or blood contact. Unfortunately, we know that this disease is currently incurable but can be postponed. Despite the fact that we know that we cannot get it through simple contact, the discrimination does not stop. In some countries, people with HIV are discriminated against, in extreme cases this can include internment in "sidatorium" camps. In countries such such as Saudi Arabia, Armenia, South Korea, Russia and others AIDS sufferers have been banned access to their countries even as tourists. Now there are associations that fight against these discriminations such as « Sidaction ».

So yes, people affected by HIV are still discriminated against as much as before. The general mentality has not changed since the discovery of this virus. But there are associations that fight against these discriminations.