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AIDS

The AIDS virus (=Acquired Immune Deficiency Syndrome) is a illness who touch the affects humans and transmit is transmitted by sexual or blood way unprotected sex or blood transmission . His Its discovery dates back to 5 june 1981 to United-States. The first transmission has been from monkey to human, where a human has been in contact with the animals blood. Since then this pandemic be the cause for most of 32 millions of persons there have been 32 million people contaminated in the world. We are going to ask ourselves if the infected persons by AIDS are victims of discriminations and if the virus him-self create inequality in country. itself creates inequalities in some countries

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Well, there is a treatment who combat against to which combats the virus et who stop his which stops its apparition with his and so, decreases mortality, didn’t have but we don't have a vaccine or final treatment now yet. The way of struggle fighting against it and the most effective stay the way is prevention. In first time, the At the beginning, AIDS touch the mostly affacted homosexuals, this virus is was temporarily call « syndrom gay » called the «gay disease». This discrimination begin towards the was directed against homosexuals because these are people were the first affected and this is based on damage generated mental and social consequences. Some injustice complicated because after many years of search , the virus touch woman and man Mal dit/Confus. Je n'ai pas compris le sens de cette phrase. The ignorance of of people concerning the way of transmission have also favorise the **__has also favourised" discrimination.

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In fact, some « physics physiological signs » are know well known and can be noticed daily for in infected persons who lives a undergo discrimination at work, or with friends and that can be accompanied with a feel feeling of exclusion. Many falses ideas are create by scare of exist about this sickness as show us shown in the movie « Philadelphia » dating from 1994. A young lawyer model and talented lawyer is victim of inequality by his associates when they discover his homosexuality and that he is reached of infected with AIDS. That The movie shows us an exceptional fight for the struggle against AIDS et and the for homosexual rights.

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Wellwhen the virus come out in appeared for the first time to in the United-States, many inequality between country comes inequalities beween some countries came to light. An inequality in the quality of healthcare existed between country in the countries which were the most affected by the virus. Sadly, the country countries the most concern are concerned by this were poor countries (88% of ill) with the absence of health material, the treatment almost nonexistent who made better the which would make life better for infected persons. In exemple For example, in Africa where the AIDS expands spreads more and more each years, and causes millions of dead with deaths because of the absence of money or healthcare. The ignorance of way concerning the means of prevention like the utilisation use of condoms don’t favorise this doesn't help the population.

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In conclusion, the virus of AIDS become a subject no taboo has become a no-taboo subject with a new technology and the prevention who can realize by many country Je n'ai pas compris cette phrase. Despite an a positive evolution and many engaged committed people everywhere in the word, this pandemic who marked times suffer some inequality causes a lot of inequality and discriminations in the world.

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