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A l'oral il y a quelques petites erreurs par rapport au texte :

"…these symptoms correspond to any what other being infections" =} "these symptoms may correspond to any what other benign infection "

"80 percentage" =} "80 percent"

"there is not cure for HIV completely" =} "there is no cure for HIV completely"

30.4 million people are infected with HIV" =} "36.7 million people are infected with HIV"

Attention à la prononciation de certains mots comme : "knowledge", "cared", "finally", "acquired", "HIV", "advanced", "rid of", "fevers", "wounds", "which", "immune", "though", "near", "danger", "diagnosis", "insufficient"

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The idea of progress

Today we are going to deal with the notion of "idea of ​​progress". First of all, progress is the action of going forward, increasing improving , being better. For a society or for humanity, progress is the evolution in the direction of an improvement, it's progressive transformation towards more knowledge and happiness, but this is not always the case. So are we going to see how people with AIDS or HIV are cared for around the world? First we will see what is AIDS is, then we will see what the symptoms are and how to get it the disease and we will finally see what treatments are possible.

For starters, AIDS or acquired immunodeficiency syndrome is the name of the disease caused by HIV (Human Immunodeficiency Virus), it weakens the body's immune system, making it more vulnerable to infections. In the more advanced stages of the disease, any small infection that the body would normally get rid of, can turn into serious illness. It is from this moment that we can say that the person has AIDS.

Secondly, HIV infection does not show specific symptoms, some people may have a few fevers, have throat pain, feeling or feel weak a few weeks after transmission, but obviously these symptoms may correspond to any what other benign infection. As the virus gradually attacks the immune system, it can take up to about 10 years to manifest itself. AIDS is transmitted today with for more than 80% by unprotected sex. A person cannot be contaminated with a kiss or the sharing of a drink, to be contaminated it is necessary to come into contact with mucous membranes or open wounds. People who have STIs (Sexually Transmitted Infections) such as syphilis, herpes, chlamydia or gonorrhea are more likely to contract the HIV virus because these diseases cause lesions which can cause entry into of the virus, which will weaken the immune system. Gay and bisexual men remain the most affected by this epidemic even though a woman is 8 times more likely to get the virus during sex with an infected person.

Finally, there is no complete cure for HIV completely, but the virus can be treated with antiretrovirals so that people can lead near-normal lives. In western countries, the danger remains the delay in diagnosis, which makes treatment more difficult. And in the countries of the South, access to treatment remains insufficient, despite the progress made in recent years.

To conclude, worldwide 36.7 million people are infected with HIV and the disease caused the death of more than 1 million people in 2016. In France, 150 000 people are said to be infected with HIV and more than 6 000 infections are taking place every year. AIDS remains one of the diseases that causes the most deaths in the world.