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Tes erreurs sont les mots qui sont barrés dans ton texte et les corrections sont celles qui sont soulignées en gras. Ton texte est assez bien mais il est un beaucoup trop long (7:03 minutes au lieu de 5!) et ton oral est correct.

Tu aurais eu environ 8/10 pour cette partie de l'oral.

A l'oral il y a quelques petites erreurs par rapport au texte :

"World Homophobia Days was etablished on May 17, 2005" =} "World Homophobia Day was established on May 17th, 2005"

"Aujourd'hui , this day is celebrated in more than 600 countries" =} "Today , this day is celebrated in more than 60 countries"

"On March 26, 2007" =} "On March 26th , 2007"

"the United Nations Human Rights Council adopt a resolution" =} "the United Nations Human Rights Council adopted a resolution"

"the Yogyakarta Principles were pretend to the United Nations" =} "the Yogyakarta Principles were presented to the United Nations"

Attention à la prononciation de certains mots comme : "idea", "implies", "remains", " variable", "theme", "society", "Sudan", "aside", "apply", "despite", "against", "labour", "discriminatory treatment", "declared", "secularized", "internalize", "depressed", "IDAHO", "France", "question", "gender", "historic", "Vienna", "high", "considered"

Il faut bien prononcer les "s" à la 3ème pers. au singulier,…

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The idea of progress

I have to introduce the notion idea of progress.

Progress is the concept that implies improvement in both the economic and scientific and social sectors. It allowed the greatest in our history, and continue continues to offer great things in our current world through innovation. However it is necessary to remember that progres is beneficial as long as it remains ethical. Its influence is variable according to the time in which it is made and according to the group who charity of it Je n'ai pas compris la fin de cette phrase.

We will treat as will speak about the theme of homophobia.

We will ask the question “how has homophobia evolved in our society?”.

At first we will talk about the current situation on homophobia.

Secondly,the actions to combat homophobia.

Today, homosexual acts are still punishable by death in seven countries: Afghanistan, Saudi Arabia, Iran, northern Nigeria, Mauritania, Sudan and Yemen. Aside from prison sentences, some countries practice state homophobia, refusing to apply constitutional rights despite recognizing human rights, and promoting persecution and physical assault against homosexuals. Homosexuality remains punishable by imprisonment (from a few months to life), bodily harm, deportation or forced labor in sixty countries **and some countries indirectly repress homosexuality (ban on support for associations, dismissals, etc.) or apply discriminatory treatment.

In the United States, in 2003, the Supreme Court declared the laws of certain federal states against sodomy 83 as unconstitutional, on the grounds that they violate the XIVth amendment to the constitution protecting the privacy and liberty of citizens.

On the other hand, in many countries, notably highly secularized countries, discrimination against homosexuals is today punished, in particular by fines. Obviously the vision of homophobia is different according to each, especially at the level of regarding religions, policies …

Homosexuals are often discriminated against, face assault and sometimes internalize it, which makes them depressed and prevents them from expressing themselves and living as they would like. World Homophobia Day was established on May 17, 2005 by Louis-Georges Tin, President of the IDAHO Committee. Today, this day is celebrated in more than 60 countries around the world. On this occasion, the Network for assistance to victims of aggression and discrimination (RAVAD) is was created in France.

On March 26, 2007, the Yogyakarta Principles were presented to the United Nations Human Rights Council. It is the first text which plans to apply international human rights to questions of sexual orientation and gender identity. Representatives from fifty-four countries supported these principles.

In 2008, following the campaign for a universal decriminalization of homosexuality, launched by the IDAHO Committee, the French government brought presented a text on sexual orientation and gender identity to the General Assembly of the United Nations. This declaration is was signed by 67 countries: it is a historic first an historic landmark. On June 15, 2011, the United Nations Human Rights Council adopted a resolution against violence related to sexual orientation and gender identity following the Vienna Declaration and Program of Action 118. Consecutively, the 119 Office of the United Nations High Commissioner for Human Rights reported on violations of these principles, including global discriminatory laws and practices.

To conclude, the homosexual person are not considered to a normal person today but some country change people's view for their well being Mal dit. Je n'ai pas compris le sens de cette phrase