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Appréciation

Tes erreurs sont les mots qui sont barrés dans ton texte et les corrections sont celles qui sont soulignées en gras. Ton texte est assez bien mais il est un peu court (4:01 minutes au lieu de 5!) et ton oral est correct.

Tu aurais eu environ 7/10 pour cette partie de l'oral.

A l'oral il y a quelques petites erreurs par rapport au texte :

"In the 1918s and early 1919s" =} "In the 1980s(nineteen eighties) and early 1990s(nineteen nineties)"

"The office of barristers decide to fire him" =} "The office of barristers decided to fire him

Attention à la prononciation de certains mots comme : "defined", "thus'', "study", "HIV","across", "decades", "announced", "Hanks", "oscars,

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The idea of progress

I am going to talk about the idea of progress. The idea of progress can be defined as an improvement, a development or a change. It can be a technical, scientific or social advance which contributes to making the world a better place. Thus, we can see that this notion can be studied through different angles and lead to the the following question : to what extent do does the fight (trop vague) of different people participates to the help our society to progress? In a first part, I’ll speak about the history of AIDS and in a second part; I’ll study the fight (très vague) of some people in everyday life.

I. History of AIDS

The human immunodeficiency virus, or HIV, is a virus that attacks the immune system. The virus is transmitted through bodily fluids such as blood, semen, vaginal fluids, anal fluids, and breast milk. Historically, HIV has most often been spread through unprotected sex, the sharing of needles for drug use, and through birth. In the 1980s and early 1990s, the outbreak of HIV and AIDS swept across the United States and the rest of the world, though the disease originated decades earlier. Today, more than 70 million people have been infected with HIV and about 35 million have died from AIDS since the start of the pandemic. In 1991, the red ribbon became an international symbol of AIDS awareness. In that year, basketball player Magic Johnson announced he had HIV, helping to further bring awareness to the issue and dispel the stereotype of it being a gay disease. Soon after, Freddie Mercury—lead singer of the band Queen—announced he had AIDS and died a day later. So, HIV testing is important for both treatment and prevention efforts. Yet, 15% of those infected with HIV are unaware they are infected

II. The fight of some people in everyday life

Secondly, every day a lot of persons defend their rights. For example, the movie Philadelphia was inspired by the live life of lawyer Geoffrey Bowers who was a homosexual and an AIDS patient. Tom Hanks embodies the role with the name: Andrew Beckett. Andrew was a brilliant lawyer, but one day his colleagues learnt he had got the AIDS. The office of barristers decided to fire him for a “case failure”. In a world which is intolerant, Andrew must fight for his rights. He meets a black and homophobic lawyer who is Joe Miller to help him. This man change changed mind about gays and both they complain against the office of barrister of them file a lawsuit against Andrew's employers . Andrew Beckett won this trial before dying. It’s a militant film for the rights of the homosexuals** and to show that AIDS patients are normal people. This movie has won many Oscars.

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To conclude, the virus can be easily transmitted which is why HIV testing is important for both treatment and prevention efforts. So a few people are fighting to spread this message and prevent the spread of this virus.