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Tes erreurs sont les mots qui sont barrés dans ton texte et les corrections sont celles qui sont soulignées en gras. Ton texte est bien mais il est un peu court (4:00 minutes au lieu de 5!) et ton oral est tout à fait convenable.

Tu aurais eu environ 8/10 pour cette partie de l'oral.

A l'oral il y a quelques petites erreurs par rapport au texte :

"the disease can be transmit through the skin" =} "the disease can be transmitted through the skin"

"so people are afraid to get close to people who are affect" =} "so people are afraid to get close to people who are affected "

"that it can be transmit through food and objects" =} "that it can be transmitted through food and objects

"AIDS is only transmit through…" =} "AIDS is only transmitted through…"

"a woman is affect and she's not a homosexual" =} "a woman is affected and she's not a homosexual

" In fact, nowhere is writing that is a homosexual disease" =} " In fact, nowhere is it written that it is a homosexual disease."

"Finally, it is transmit throughout unprotect sexual intercourse or throughout blood during transfusion" =} "Finally, it is transmitted through unprotected sexual intercourse or through blood during transfusion"

"above all throughout information" =} "above all through information

Attention Ă  la prononciation de certains mots comme : "having", "through", "illness", "denial", "transmitted", "worst", "disease", "though", "knowledge", "underpriviliged", "through", "blood", "needles",

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The idea of progress

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Today we are going to talk about the notion of the idea of progress. For me, this notion evokes material progress, human but also thought scientific progress. That’s why we’re going to talk about homosexuality and AIDS and ask ourselves how thinking has evolved on the subject of AIDS. First we’re going to see what people think about AIDS and then **__we'll look at" the truth about AIDS.

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First of all we can see that in the movie philadelphia or in the document the handshake that people have haven't! a lot of insight and judgment on AIDS. First, Mc Dermott is afraid of having AIDS after shaking hands with Andrex Andrew Beckett who has AIDS. Because he thinks people think that the disease can be transmitted through the skin, so people are afraid to get close to people who are affected infected. We can also see in this document, the rejection of these people. In fact, Andrew Beckett is fired from his company because of his illness, so we can add that there is a denial. We can also see that in the film, the lawsuit takes a long time with the denial that it is not because of the illness that Andrew Beckett is fired when a lot of people think that there is a risk of contamination outside of sexual intercourse, that it can be transmitted through food and objects,… =} La dernière partie de cette phrase n'a pas beaucoup de sens par rapport au reste de la phrase

The majority of people think that AIDS only affects homosexuals, which leads to a lot of discrimination and homophobic remarks. The worst thing is when people say they deserve to have AIDS. You may therefore have noticed that there is a lot of prejudice, bad and false thinking about the disease of AIDS.

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We will now see the truth about AIDS, according to my research but also in the movie philadelphia, we learn that AIDS is only transmitted through sexual intercourse. Besides, it doesn't just happen to gay people. In the movie, a woman is affected and she's not a homosexual. AIDS affects everyone, men, women and children. In fact, nowhere is it written that it is a homosexual disease.

On the other hand, women are much less emphasized during prevention Je ne comprends pas le sens de cette partie de la phrase , even though women represent 64% of the sick. Which would explain the population's lack of knowledge. Same with the kids, you never hear from about them, even I didn't know before doing this sequence that AIDS affects children. The disease mainly affects underprivileged and uncared for children, with only one in two children dying before the age of 2.

Finally, it is transmitted through unprotected sexual intercourse or through blood during transfusion or exchange of contaminated needles. It can also be transmitted from mother to child during pregnancy, childbirth or breastfeeding. People often forget this, but now people can live with AIDS.

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In conclusion, I think it's important to beware of prejudice. And that the idea of progress for the mentality regarding mentalities is above all through information that could reduce homophobic statements or discrimination.

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